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Re: CCC X MOC critiques thread

Postby gid617 » Fri Mar 15, 2013 2:16 pm

I'm sure it hasn't been two weeks yet, but it seems that rule isn't in place any more? If it is, my apologies. I'd appreciate critiques on this model (my second Ill Advised Journey entry):
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Re: CCC X MOC critiques thread

Postby friskywhiskers » Fri Mar 15, 2013 5:20 pm

Thanks for the critique Bruce! I didn't even think to put in the Trade/tolls Category b/c I assumed that required some sort of gate or port. Oh well!
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Re: CCC X MOC critiques thread

Postby Bruce N H » Fri Mar 15, 2013 6:51 pm

Frisky,

Maybe it would have been a stretch in Trade and Tolls, I was just thinking this based on the category description of "regulation of medieval trade", thinking that's what the commerce guild would be involved in.

Gid617,

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Well, I do like how you embraced the Duplo challenge, and the Duplo animal is kind of fun. But, well, it's made of 11 basic bricks. While it's pretty good for something made of that, it ultimately looks like something in the directions for a set for younger builders rather than a real AFOL/TFOL MOC. The detailing on the ground is nice, but I wish you'd actually made this cover a whole baseplate, and the rock formation and wooden scaffolding are well done, but way too spindly to look realistic.

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Re: CCC X MOC critiques thread

Postby Legonardo » Sat Mar 16, 2013 4:47 am

well its been a week since you last crituqued my build, but the 2 week rule seams to have dissapeared, could I have feedback on this one please?
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sorry for all those extra images in teh folder, they wern't there till I got a free pro account which expires this month, then they'll go
thanks for the feedback one the other two!
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Re: CCC X MOC critiques thread

Postby Bentoft » Mon Mar 18, 2013 11:40 am

I would like to have some feedback on
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Re: CCC X MOC critiques thread

Postby soccerkid6 » Tue Mar 19, 2013 11:19 am

Would love to hear some feedback on my Set Rebuild entry: http://www.legocreator57.tk/CCCX-Set.php
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Re: CCC X MOC critiques thread

Postby gid617 » Tue Mar 19, 2013 11:43 am

Yes, I realized that the size of that one would probably kill it (the initial idea was 48x48 but, well, I ran out pretty fast). Thanks for the critique though, maybe one day I'll try to redo that build a bit bigger...
I'd appreciate some critique on my first Medieval Life entry as well:
http://www.flickr.com/photos/gid617/set ... 050809602/
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Re: CCC X MOC critiques thread

Postby Bruce N H » Tue Mar 19, 2013 8:14 pm

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First, realize that this is an honorable mention, so it scored really highly. I really like the color scheme, and the mixing in a few brick-bricks into the wall to give some subtle texture. The rocks and snow-scaping are very well done. I did think the curved supports at the corners of the wooden structure atop the tower looked wrong - those should be concave curves rather than convex if they're going to give any actual support. I thought the wooden part extended a little too much beyond the stone part - it seems a little rickety to me. I was curious to see the other side of the wall. One other suggestion would have been to add another element - perhaps a traveler leading a horse and the guard stepping out to ask them who they were.

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Again, this is another honorable mention winner, so scored very well. There was a lot to love in this MOC - all of the different mosaic patterns, the details on the shelves, the little table where the generals were planning their battles. I did think all of the patterning got to be a little much. Perhaps the portion on the right-hand side of the back wall should have just had simple arches with the dark gray background, like on the right-hand wall, instead of the mosaic pattern. I did think the proportions of the room seemed a little off. You've got this huge room, and all of the shelves and the generals' map/table are shoved over onto one side, with this big empty open dance floor. I know, you wanted to show off your mosaic floor, but it ends up looking odd. I think it would have been better if you'd spread the bookshelves and the generals more evenly through the room. Oh, that little stairway going off in the arch on the right-hand side is really great.

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Again, this was another outstanding entry. I loved the way you referenced the panel walls from the original, but actually gave the wall some realistic thickness. The trick of having it fold up into a keep was particularly nice - I could imagine that being a great feature of a real set. It's a little odd that the base extends out one stud for an eight-wide section. It's obvious why you ended up having to add that, but it seems that you should have then gone back and just extended the whole thing forward by one stud so it was all even. In this case we had a direct comparison, as Eklund did the same set, and I just gave the slight edge to his since I liked his more-rounded tower and the way he made the windows into arrow slits with beveled edges, but I really liked both versions.

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I have to say, looking at the complete set of MOCs you entered this year, you ran a little hot and cold. Some I liked much more, like the priest, the printing press, the Akbri Bridge, and the inn, but this one left me a little cold. I wasn't a huge fan of some of the different color schemes, like the little section of street that's blue and black tiles, or the wild splashes of red around the door of the white building. And then you had some nice detail, like the shutters on the white building, where you did them in white against a white wall and you could hardly see them - here some color would have been nice. I liked the roof on the white building a lot, but it looks a little crooked. My favorite portions were the bridge, and the little close-up shot of the guy carrying a barrel - there you really achieved some realism in the posing and head/hair-choice.
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Re: CCC X MOC critiques thread

Postby mencot » Wed Mar 20, 2013 4:37 am

I would like to have some feedback on my CCCX custom figs:
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Re: CCC X MOC critiques thread

Postby Bruce N H » Thu Mar 21, 2013 1:49 pm

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I should start by noting that I'm not a customizer, so while I may critique the end result, I certainly couldn't do it myself. This looks pretty good from the thumbnail, but when you look at it close-up it's kind of messy - you can see the different brush strokes, etc. The idea of doing a custom lute is great, but the result is lumpy, and ends up looking a little like a club instead. I do really like the shape of the hat. That's a nicely done custom accessory.
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Re: CCC X MOC critiques thread

Postby gid617 » Thu Mar 21, 2013 4:01 pm

Bruce, yes, that was one of my first entries and also one of my worst! Actually the blue and black section of the street was supposed to be a blanket, but obviously I didn't do a good job portraying that! I probably tried to shove too much into the build and as a result it looked a bit too busy (even to me :roll: ). Thanks for the critique, though!
I'd love to hear your thought's on my Medieval Priest, which was my first customization attempt... http://www.flickr.com/photos/gid617/set ... 315162486/
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Re: CCC X MOC critiques thread

Postby mencot » Thu Mar 21, 2013 4:13 pm

Thanks Bruce, yea customizing isn´t really easy to do, I really like it though but have to find better ways how to make tiny details on the figs because my hands aren´t so steady any more as when I was younger.
There are a few more entries I would love to hear some comments about, I see that the 2 week wait is gone now but I won´t load you with entries.
One more entry and then I will wait again.
What about this moc, what was good and what could been done better:
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Re: CCC X MOC critiques thread

Postby Bruce N H » Sun Mar 24, 2013 10:35 pm

Gid617,

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I liked this quite a bit. I thought the glitter worked out well. Yes, it certainly could have been cleaner, but really tough to do using this sort of technique. The glitter was messiest on the hat - I might have suggested using a different hat, or else just going with hair. One mistake is that the printing is on the wrong side of the Bible.

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This entry did a pretty good job of referencing the source material (though you didn't include the bird). I'm not a fan of the black/light gray color scheme, but that's true to the Black Monarch's Castle. I did think the crypt was too busy - it felt that in this case less detailing would have accomplished more for you. The tree falls into the trap that many LEGO trees fall into - when you are looking at it head-on it's just a bunch of parallel lines pointing out of a trunk.

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Re: CCC X MOC critiques thread

Postby Legonardo » Mon Mar 25, 2013 6:54 am

hey could I have feedback on this?
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Re: CCC X MOC critiques thread

Postby soccerkid6 » Mon Mar 25, 2013 8:25 pm

Thanks again for all the very helpful criticism.
Some feedback on my medieval life entry: http://www.legocreator57.tk/Varlyrio.php would be appreciated :)
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