The Watch Tower Knight

[Blue Head]

Since the story is still in construction there is only text, but who cares. The story is about a young servant whos town is attacked by an unknown force. The rest is for you to read...

http://www.freewebs.com/sirknight1/

note: I've only finished ch 1 so far, I will post updates. If you have any comment or if you have something against the story post here. Also there is a forum on the nav bar, so plz join.

[Spongey]

I really like this story. You do a good job describing the young boy's attitude towards the world. I can't wait to read the rest.

[Blue Head]

The second chapter is done, and can be found on the site under nothing else but the second chapter on my freeweb. Take a look!

[Prince Imdol]

It looks like you have a good start. I do suggest making a charecter page, because your story is a bit confusing, and also I suggest maybe making the sentences a bit longer and more detailed writing wise. \
Although in seens, keep them short and sweet.


P.I

[Blue Head]

I'll take your advise and make the character page. Hope it helps, more will be added onto it as I make more of the story.

[Maedhros]

I'll take your advise and make the character page. Hope it helps, more will be added onto it as I make more of the story.

Hmm... if you want my view I advice you to not do a character page.

I think it's much nicer to get to know the characters as you read the story, and that way you skip the possible spoilers of a character page too...

..and, what usual novel has a character page in the beginning anyway?

I´ll comment on the story later...

[Blue Head]

good point, I'll wait to make my decision after some more people reply. :D

[Prince Imdol]

I mean just a charecter page with the peoples names, ranks, where they live, but no giving away stuff.


Thomas C.

[Blue Head]

well... ill see, as for now i have to compliet the story...

[Maedhros]

I mean just a charecter page with the peoples names, ranks, where they live, but no giving away stuff.


Thomas C.

Well, I for one still think having that page there is "giving away stuff" but that´s just me...

Including a little list at the end for reference might be an idea though. (But you don´t need to worry about that before you get there I guess )

[Blue Head]

Okay, ill think about it okay, any way... the third chapter is done, kinda short, but done non-the-less! This is where it starts to stray away from real medeivil and into a little bit of fantacy.

[Prince Imdol]

Mahedros and I are at war. (Just kidding)

P.I

[Maedhros]

Mahedros and I are at war. (Just kidding)

P.I

Oh, well, I´m a pacifist but I guess I could go to war against you for spelling my name wrong

[Prince Imdol]

Lol, sorry about that.

P.I