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Prouloge
Posted: Tue Jun 22, 2004 1:03 pm
by erikut
the prouloge of my story (kingdom of anor) is finished the linnk is
here (link to site in signature) i dont know when the chapters of the story will be finished but i will notice you
Posted: Tue Jun 22, 2004 1:57 pm
by wlister
Hi erikut,
I like the story, you have a great start there. Your story reminds me a bit of a cross between the Reign of Fire movie and the Shannara books. Have you thought of enlisting an editor? I have a few skills in that department and I would be happy to edit your story to make it a little easier to read. PM me if you would like some help.
Will
Posted: Tue Jun 22, 2004 3:07 pm
by erikut
hehe thanks i seen the regin of fire and got some inspiratin from there but i have never read the shannara books (tried to start once but i didnt finish it before i had to deliver it back) the future stuff i got from this horror cartoon have no idea what its called in english. it would be great of you to be my editor so i just pm the chapter or something as i make them (wich will make you the first to read them that must be an honur)
Posted: Tue Jun 22, 2004 3:11 pm
by JPinoy
You also might wanna use white instead of bright green as your text. It kinda hurts my eyes when I read that.
Posted: Tue Jun 22, 2004 4:40 pm
by Formendacil
Visually, things look good, and story sounds good. I just want to point out, as Will did, that your spelling/grammatical skills could use a little work. I would guess, that since you're from Norway, English isn't your native language?
Posted: Tue Jun 22, 2004 6:40 pm
by erikut
i vill change the green into whie at once and i know i write english like a blind horse whit eating disoders
Posted: Wed Jun 23, 2004 3:33 am
by the_Rascal_King
erikut wrote:i know i write english like a blind horse whit eating disoders
hehehe! I bow to the King of Similies!
Posted: Thu Jun 24, 2004 8:04 pm
by Robin Hood
Looks great. I didn't any spelling erorrs, but then I am pathetic at spelling and writting, even though english is my native langquauge. (or however you spell it). The picture at the end, did it mean anything?
Posted: Thu Jun 24, 2004 8:13 pm
by jamitjames
Robin Hood wrote:Looks great. I didn't any spelling erorrs, but then I am pathetic at spelling and writting, even though english is my native langquauge. (or however you spell it). The picture at the end, did it mean anything?
I think that wlister did some great editing. Thats why.
Posted: Thu Jun 24, 2004 8:16 pm
by wlister
I did some quick editorial work for erikut. There may be a few grammatical anomalies, but the spelling should be spot on.
Will