I just gave it a quick look, ant it sound great. have you consider making a small video of the first chapter? a stop motion one of course,
keep up the good flow going
Clearly the bard was not only drunk but also somewhat insane
What can I say, I'm a sucker for LEGO comics and stories.
Very human personalities - all of the characters seem "real" so far, which is very cool. It will make the story interesting if you can keep it up!
The vig with the Casket and priest in wagon is very well done and really sets a strong scene for the entry into the town.
Drunken dwarves and bards can get a bit old if it is played on too much, but they are very nice to have in a story, and so far it's been very funny - I even "LOL'd" once
The Transition to new characters in the story was quite confusing to me the first time - I thought I had clicked the wrong link or maybe that it was wrong, but after I got the hang of your style, it was fine and quite cool. You might want to make that first transition a bit more obvious just for the sake of allowing your readers to get used to it.
Finally, the story so far is REALLY cool! It's kind of the basic undead story, but it does have a bit of a twist, which is the neat part of it all.
Yeah, shaw that one comin'
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