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Look out, Sava...

Postby Barbapple » Tue Aug 24, 2004 5:54 am

Because here comes Barbod! :D
That's right! the much anticipated.....er......slightly anticipated.....er.....anticipated.....er...well someone must have been waiting for it...
Anyways, The *New* Tales of Barbod are up and running!
And without any ferther ado....
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Please, please let me know you opinion! I've worked hard on this...so yeah :P

Peace out!
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Postby kajo163 » Tue Aug 24, 2004 9:24 am

Hey!
It looks really good, I like that you make the bulls the good guys, thinking outside the box there:)



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Postby Legolas » Tue Aug 24, 2004 10:16 am

Hi Brian,

Nice work :)

Can't wait to see more :D

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Postby erikut » Tue Aug 24, 2004 12:27 pm

nice really liked it cant wait to se more of that story :D
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Postby Sir Vincent » Tue Aug 24, 2004 12:37 pm

Will the falcons defeat the Bulls? Is this the end of Barbod? I will make it my quest to find out...I just don't get why King Leo is with the bulls...
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Postby Duke_Dave » Tue Aug 24, 2004 2:43 pm

Great work! Nice plot! Can't wait for more!


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Re: Look out, Sava...

Postby Lord_Of_The_LEGO » Tue Aug 24, 2004 3:32 pm

Barbapple wrote:Because here comes Barbod! :D
That's right! the much anticipated.....er......slightly anticipated.....er.....anticipated.....er...well someone must have been waiting for it...


I've been waiting ages for this! :D

I'll make a deal with you, I'll update the Lone Falcon Chronicles more often, and you continue to update the Tales of Barbod!

This is a great begining, at last we see into Barbod's past! :twisted:

I can't wait for more!
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Postby Formendacil » Tue Aug 24, 2004 3:51 pm

Looks good so far! The pics are good and the story's good. I'd recommend running over your actual wording a bit more, sometimes your word order is a little confusing.

But otherwise, it looks great.
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Postby jon_p » Tue Aug 24, 2004 4:24 pm

Great start! I can't wait to find out what happens in the next part, it will be good to see the battle. You have written it well, so that it ends on a cliff hanger (of some sort) so we (well, I) want to read the next bit.

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Postby The Josh » Tue Aug 24, 2004 8:16 pm

I like the first part. It is very well done and it makes you want to read more. If you keep writing I'll keep reading!


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Postby wlister » Tue Aug 24, 2004 9:22 pm

Very Interesting story. You have a great start here. Keep it up. I like the way you have illustrated the story and I am looking forward to seeing some updates. :D

You might want to enlist an editor much the way Anthony has done. It takes someone who is outside the story to see some of the grammatical mistakes we make. There are a few here and they do detract from the story.

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Postby Lord_Of_The_LEGO » Tue Aug 24, 2004 9:38 pm

wlister wrote:You might want to enlist an editor much the way Anthony has done. It takes someone who is outside the story to see some of the grammatical mistakes we make. There are a few here and they do detract from the story.


I'd be more than willing to be your editor, all I ask is due credit. PM me if interested.
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Postby Barbapple » Tue Aug 24, 2004 10:09 pm

Wow. :shock: 11 replies. I must say, this is far better than I expected. Well, now is the time I reply to the replies.

Hey!
It looks really good, I like that you make the bulls the good guys, thinking outside the box there:)

-JOEL#


Thanks, Joel! It's a rather long (and boring) story how the bulls became good, and the falcons bad.....I'll have to tell you some time....

Hi Brian,

Nice work

Can't wait to see more

-- Joey


Hi Joey! Thanks....belive it or not, I'm working on Chapter 1 as we speak--er--type. It's fun having too much time :P

nice really liked it cant wait to se more of that story


Thanks.

Will the falcons defeat the Bulls? Is this the end of Barbod? I will make it my quest to find out...I just don't get why King Leo is with the bulls...


oooooo, the suspence is building, lol :D I always loved the king Leo head, and he was the best 'Old man bull' I could find. (Thank you Legofreak)

Great work! Nice plot! Can't wait for more!


Dave


Hey, Dave! Thanks! You'll see more, soon enough...

I've been waiting ages for this!

I'll make a deal with you, I'll update the Lone Falcon Chronicles more often, and you continue to update the Tales of Barbod!

This is a great begining, at last we see into Barbod's past!

I can't wait for more!


I knew someone out there must have been waiting for this!
And you've got yourself a deal! Thanks, Nate.!

Looks good so far! The pics are good and the story's good. I'd recommend running over your actual wording a bit more, sometimes your word order is a little confusing.

But otherwise, it looks great.


I have my new editor working on that 8)

Great start! I can't wait to find out what happens in the next part, it will be good to see the battle. You have written it well, so that it ends on a cliff hanger (of some sort) so we (well, I) want to read the next bit.

Jon.


Hey, Jon! Thanks! I know, I know, My writing rocks..and I know I'll be the next Tolkin 8)....or at least the next Robert Munch.....no?......Ok, I will be the first Brian Gibbons!

I like the first part. It is very well done and it makes you want to read more. If you keep writing I'll keep reading!


-The Josh


Hey The Josh!
Wow that sounds like bad grammer :?
It's these repys that make me want to keep writing :D
So if you keep reading, I'll keep writing!
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Very Interesting story. You have a great start here. Keep it up. I like the way you have illustrated the story and I am looking forward to seeing some updates.

You might want to enlist an editor much the way Anthony has done. It takes someone who is outside the story to see some of the grammatical mistakes we make. There are a few here and they do detract from the story.

Will


Wow, I reply from Will! My story must be good 8)
Thanks you, Will! I have enlisted an editor.....

I'd be more than willing to be your editor, all I ask is due credit. PM me if interested.


There's my editor :D

Well, thank you ALL for the very kind replys! I needed that!

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Postby Robin Hood » Tue Aug 24, 2004 10:31 pm

Cool. I like it. Great work. I don't quite like the idea of the story, but each to his own. I bet some of you wouldn't like the views I put on some other themes.

Great job again. Can't wait for more. :wink:
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Postby JPinoy » Wed Aug 25, 2004 3:56 am

Nice prologue! I hope it becomes into a well made Lego story.
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