AK_Brickster wrote:Your storytelling ability is very good. I found this to be quite entertaining. However, your spelling and grammar could benefit from using a proof reading tool such as can be found in Microsoft Word. I'd suggest pasting your stories into Word and using the spellchecking tool before posting here. That should clean it up quite a bit.
Purple Wolf wrote:So I thougth (thought) that I'd share with you my view of the wolfpack (Wolf Pack) with a breif (brief) part of there (their) history.
Year of the wolf packs (Wolf Packs) 1-200
Many years ago(,) the WolfPack (Wolf Pack) where a there (were their) own kingdom, (.) (T)hey were a proud kingdom until the BlackKnightss (Black Knights) and Dragonmasters (Dragon Masters) almost took over the entire kingdom. What was left of the mighty kingdom fled to an old fort in the forest at the base of a mountain. The fort has bean (been) hidden from all except the Wolf Pack. The DM and BK still go into the forest to find them, but they never come out. On the odd time they would find it(,) but they would be immediately captured and killed. People may think that the Wolf Pack are thieves who steal just to be rich, but no (...but that is not the case). Yes they steal(,) but there (they're) not just thieves(,) there (they're) survivors of a mighty knigdom (kingdom).
The first leader after the Wolfpack (Wolf Pack) fled to the forest was King Worf the (T)hird at the age of thirty. When they fled to the mountain(,) he was reduced to (L)ord. He then sent his best knights to kill the BlackKnight (Black Knight) king as revenge, and failed. The rest of the Wolf pack (Pack) hanged him for letting the kingdom fall to the Blackknights (Black Knights). Worf was at the age of thirty-three when he was hanged. Seeing as King Worf didn’t have any kids(,) there was no one to be the next in line to lead the Wolf Pack(.)
A year after Lord Worf died(,) the head knight(,) Sir Alexander (age twenty-seven)(,) took place as (L)ord. He was a good ruler and a kind one too. Not much happened when he was (L)ord except there was a assassination attempt on his life from a Forestmen (Forestman) who found their castle. When he turned sixty-three he was murdered in his sleep buy (by) a Dragonmaster (Dragon Master) who was killed trying to escape the castle.
Now Lord Alexander’s sun (son) Wolverrandum was elected Lord at the age of thirty-eight. He had a short rain (reign) (at this time in history(,) the term (")Knight(") had disappeared(,) and the term (")packs(") had started to be used at small outposts). After being the ruling (ruler) for two years(,) he was over throne (overthrown) by an unknown person. The unknown person had a small grope (group) of people, (no comma) which (who) had wolf pack (Wolf Pack) uniforms. He might of bin (have been) a lost person that had bean (been) captured by the Blackknights or the Dragonmasters. No one knew. He let Wolverrandum live(,) but he was reduced to guard.
Year 343-the present day
The person who over threw (overthrew) Wolverrandum was called(,) (")Wolffang("). His age is a mystery(,) but some has (have) speculated that he’s a lot older than he looks. After Lord Wolffang took over the (W)olf (P)ack(,) he began to raid any caravans that went threw (through) their forest. This was the beginning of the WolfPack (Wolf Pack) that people know of today(,) A.K.A(,) the stealing, murdering, lying thieves. Lord Wolffang was a ruthless and evil (L)ord; he is the (L)ord of the Wolf (P)ack to this day. A side note about him is that (a) few have begun to think that he is very old(,) and that he’s a werewolf(,) but there has been no evidence to prove it yet.
Hope you liked it.
Just as a side not (note) I might make a story about the wolfpack (Wolf Pack)(,) but I would like to here (hear) what you think of this before I go makeing (making) a story.
Well I'm glad my story telling abilities are good, As for the grammer (grammar) well it actually was in Microsoft word befor (before), but if you could point out some of the major mistakes I would really appreciate it.
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