Fraun's World-Chapter 2 'To Grandmother's house we go'

forester3291 · Post by **forester3291** » Wed Jan 05, 2005 3:00 pm

I finally got all the pics taken, wrote the story, and uploaded them to Brickshelf.

Again, tell me what you think.

Due to the largeness of some pages you will ahve to make them bigger by clicking on the small box in the lower right hand corner.

Lord_Of_The_LEGO · Post by **Lord_Of_The_LEGO** » Wed Jan 05, 2005 7:23 pm

Hehe! That's pretty funny! And the Lone Falcon get mentioned!

Some suggestions; the pics are a little dark, which makes it pretty hard to see was is going on. Also, the is one spelling error; 'waster' when I think you mean 'master'.

Other than that, it's great!

forester3291 · Post by **forester3291** » Wed Jan 05, 2005 7:40 pm

Lord_Of_The_LEGO wrote:

Hehe! That's pretty funny! And the Lone Falcon get mentioned!

Some suggestions; the pics are a little dark, which makes it pretty hard to see was is going on. Also, the is one spelling error; 'waster' when I think you mean 'master'.

Other than that, it's great!

Yea. I noticed that spelling error right after I posted it.

I will change it though. My MS Word didn't pick up the splling error. Oh well.

I know what you mean about some of the pics being too dark. I try to get the best lighting possible but then the pics are too yellowish. I took the pics and my Grandma's house and the rooms were dark and when I turned the light on the were to bright. Any sugestions anyone?

TheOrk · Post by **TheOrk** » Wed Jan 05, 2005 7:41 pm

Good job so far. The "giant" was scary, too scary. If ever I get my own story published on the web, it has the same setting as this and the Lone Falcon story.

Ja_izzle · Post by **Ja_izzle** » Wed Jan 05, 2005 8:38 pm

Very good work, its an execellant story, and a great plot.... a good way to pass some time..., reading it I mean.

Jason