But it sure seems to be being set up that way...; of course he could give him an incorrect treatment or the prince could be crippled for life or something which would really tick off the king, of course, all of those are pretty far-fetched...smcginnis wrote:Thanks. It seems like what I said is true, that he'll be banished for Vasilis' death, but I don't know, it could turn out differently.
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"You know the golden rule, He who has the gold makes the rules"
I'm 13.
I'm 13.
Its been a few days since the last update, and I've managed to do quite a few scenes, so here is a supersized update:
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory18.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory19.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory20.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory21.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory22.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory23.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory24.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory25.jpg
The whole despairing story, when moderated, of course:
http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=193873
Steve
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory18.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory19.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory20.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory21.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory22.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory23.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory24.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory25.jpg
The whole despairing story, when moderated, of course:
http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=193873
Steve
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Very Nice installment . I'm glad that it wasn't the king's choice to have him thrown from the kingdom. But who is the new guy?
(This may be a mistake on my part but I beleive there is a mistype in the last picture)
All over very nice,
Nazgul
(This may be a mistake on my part but I beleive there is a mistype in the last picture)
All over very nice,
Nazgul
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I'm 13.
I'm 13.
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Hmm... the plot thickens... like maple syrup in the snow... oh, excuse me, my mind was wandering. This is a very nice installment, I wonder what will happen next? As always, looking forward to more,
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Say it "ESS-MICK-GIN-ISS", with a hard "G", as in "get".
I'm a Pumpkin.
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Say it "ESS-MICK-GIN-ISS", with a hard "G", as in "get".
I'm a Pumpkin.
[url=http://www.freerice.com/]Free Rice[/url]
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Yes that is a typo. I'm going to go back and fix it (and some other things) later tonight.nazgul wrote: (This may be a mistake on my part but I beleive there is a mistype in the last picture)
Steve
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Here is the next addition. I've included scene 25 again, as I've rewritten it (further review this morning made me think it wasn't quite right and was too long):
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory25.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory26.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory27.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory28.jpg
The whole visionary story, when moderated, of course:
http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=193873
Steve
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory25.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory26.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory27.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory28.jpg
The whole visionary story, when moderated, of course:
http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=193873
Steve
Last edited by Athos on Fri Sep 08, 2006 3:42 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Aha, he quests! I'm really liking this story. Cool name for the city. I like the way he was magically visited.
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Learning French.
Say it "ESS-MICK-GIN-ISS", with a hard "G", as in "get".
I'm a Pumpkin.
[url=http://www.freerice.com/]Free Rice[/url]
Say it "ESS-MICK-GIN-ISS", with a hard "G", as in "get".
I'm a Pumpkin.
[url=http://www.freerice.com/]Free Rice[/url]
Here is the latest addition, with some serious troll fighting action. I would also caution younger or sensitive readers, that there are some disturbing scenes in this entry:
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory29.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory30.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory31.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory32.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory33.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory34.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory35.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory36.jpg
The whole sacrificial story, when moderated, of course:
http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=193873
Steve
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory29.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory30.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory31.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory32.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory33.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory34.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory35.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory36.jpg
The whole sacrificial story, when moderated, of course:
http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=193873
Steve
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Hmm, kind of saddish addition, but still good. I'm guessing that Kazimar's black robes at the beginning of the story are the same beige robes, but very dirty? Oh, and frame thirty-two doesn't work.
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Learning French.
Say it "ESS-MICK-GIN-ISS", with a hard "G", as in "get".
I'm a Pumpkin.
[url=http://www.freerice.com/]Free Rice[/url]
Say it "ESS-MICK-GIN-ISS", with a hard "G", as in "get".
I'm a Pumpkin.
[url=http://www.freerice.com/]Free Rice[/url]
That's because I forgot to upload it... its fixed now.
Steve
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Well I finally feel like I'm nearing the end. I'll be glad when this is over and done with. Writing with a deadline is taxing work, but here is the latest:
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory37.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory38.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory39.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory40.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory41.jpg
The whole subterranian gallery:
http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=193873
Steve
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory37.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory38.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory39.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory40.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory41.jpg
The whole subterranian gallery:
http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=193873
Steve
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Story's good, but I've noticed a few grammatical errors in the most recent posts. Also, one of the frames seems to be an older version of the first one, and we're missing the encounter with the sahkar.
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Could you point out the grammer errors when you notice them? I'd like to go back and fix them.
Steve
What do you mean?Also, one of the frames seems to be an older version of the first one, and we're missing the encounter with the sahkar.
Steve
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