The Wanderer (My Contest Entry; Completed 9-19-06)
The Wanderer (My Contest Entry; Completed 9-19-06)
Here is my entry for the classic-castle storyteller contest, as least those parts that are done. I plan to post it in installments like my JT stories. I hope you like it:
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory01.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory02.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory03.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory04.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory05.jpg
The whole wandering story, when moderated, of course:
http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=193873
Steve, who may just be able to finish before the deadline...
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory01.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory02.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory03.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory04.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory05.jpg
The whole wandering story, when moderated, of course:
http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=193873
Steve, who may just be able to finish before the deadline...
Last edited by Athos on Wed Sep 20, 2006 1:03 am, edited 7 times in total.
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nice, enjoyable to read, creates deep suspense already. I shall look forward to seeing this unravel...
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This sounds good, can't wait for the rest of it!
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Ahh... I'm truley a sucker for castle stories... and it's cool to see you taking your style to the castle setting.
I really like it so far - you've done a good job setting it up and showing us how the main character is a ruined man, almost without hope and memory - but it's still "raw" enough so that it doesn't have the typical "tragic hero" feel.
Anyway, I like it so far~
I really like it so far - you've done a good job setting it up and showing us how the main character is a ruined man, almost without hope and memory - but it's still "raw" enough so that it doesn't have the typical "tragic hero" feel.
Anyway, I like it so far~
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n. pl. Knights Templars or Knights Templar
1.A member of an order of knights founded about 1118 to protect pilgrims in the Holy Land during the Second Crusade.
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n. pl. Knights Templars or Knights Templar
1.A member of an order of knights founded about 1118 to protect pilgrims in the Holy Land during the Second Crusade.
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Ah, I like this. I really like the way he is fallen (one of my favourite types of characters). Also I really like the way you write: lots of ... and repeating of some words (reminds me of my own style in some short stories I´ve written)
Anyways, good work, I really look forward to see what will become of this.
Anyways, good work, I really look forward to see what will become of this.
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Here are the next 5 entries, which should wrap up the introduction:
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory06.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory07.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory08.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory09.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory10.jpg
The whole memorable story, when moderated, of course:
http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=193873
Steve
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory06.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory07.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory08.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory09.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory10.jpg
The whole memorable story, when moderated, of course:
http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=193873
Steve
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Good installment. I'm glad to see the goblin good, as I've started thinking of them not as evil, but more like neutral/misunderstood. Of course, he might be an exception. Are you going to take advantage of the many similar faces for this story (ie: this, and this)? Looking forward to more,
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Learning French.
Say it "ESS-MICK-GIN-ISS", with a hard "G", as in "get".
I'm a Pumpkin.
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Say it "ESS-MICK-GIN-ISS", with a hard "G", as in "get".
I'm a Pumpkin.
[url=http://www.freerice.com/]Free Rice[/url]
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Very good, its nice to see the story unravel more and more. Your use of language is impressive, too. Give us more!!!
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In this latest addition, we learn a bit more about the Wanderer's past... including the origin of his quest and his name:
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory11.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory12.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory13.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory14.jpg
The whole serpentine story, when moderated, of course:
http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=193873
Steve
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory11.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory12.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory13.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory14.jpg
The whole serpentine story, when moderated, of course:
http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=193873
Steve
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Hmm, good addition, I'm guessing Kazimar gets banished because Vasilis dies or something? Or is that to cliché?
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Learning French.
Say it "ESS-MICK-GIN-ISS", with a hard "G", as in "get".
I'm a Pumpkin.
[url=http://www.freerice.com/]Free Rice[/url]
Say it "ESS-MICK-GIN-ISS", with a hard "G", as in "get".
I'm a Pumpkin.
[url=http://www.freerice.com/]Free Rice[/url]
Got around to doing a few more scenes tonight. Hope you like them:
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory15.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory16.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... ory17b.jpg
The whole venemous story, when moderated, of course:
http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=193873
Ssssssssssssssteve
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory15.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... tory16.jpg
http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Athos ... ory17b.jpg
The whole venemous story, when moderated, of course:
http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=193873
Ssssssssssssssteve
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Hmm, good idea to use another Ron head for the sick Vasilis (even if they don't look like each other).
Also, when I click for frame 17, it gives me a 404 not found error.
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Also, when I click for frame 17, it gives me a 404 not found error.
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Learning French.
Say it "ESS-MICK-GIN-ISS", with a hard "G", as in "get".
I'm a Pumpkin.
[url=http://www.freerice.com/]Free Rice[/url]
Say it "ESS-MICK-GIN-ISS", with a hard "G", as in "get".
I'm a Pumpkin.
[url=http://www.freerice.com/]Free Rice[/url]
Ooops... Its fixed now.
Steve
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Thanks. It seems like what I said is true, that he'll be banished for Vasilis' death, but I don't know, it could turn out differently.
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Learning French.
Say it "ESS-MICK-GIN-ISS", with a hard "G", as in "get".
I'm a Pumpkin.
[url=http://www.freerice.com/]Free Rice[/url]
Say it "ESS-MICK-GIN-ISS", with a hard "G", as in "get".
I'm a Pumpkin.
[url=http://www.freerice.com/]Free Rice[/url]