Just read it, and it was very good! Felt quite long though, was it really less than 20 pages with double spacing? Or maybe I´m just tired
You described the environments very well, and the way you built up the suspense was really nice.
Not too spectacular when it came to MOCs though, but on the other hand there wasn´t really much to build for this story as it took place out in the forest
Good work anyways!
"Hinc satis elucet maiorem habere uim ad discenda ista liberam curiositatem quam meticulosam necessitatem.”
- Augustinus Hipponensis