Chapter 2

[Spongey]

Chapter 2 of my story is up. It can be found at
http://www.freewebs.com/land-of-timbermen/chaptertwo.htm
Please visit and tell me what you think. Thanks.

[kelderic]

Very good. I saw almost no typos, and I'm glad to see that you have changed all the pages to the green background.

Kelderic

[Prince Imdol]

So, Its a great chapter, no typos, but you should put some text on your homepage, like a brief outline of the story.

[Spongey]

I'll put an outline on the homepage soon. Right now, though, school is starting up again after exams, so I might not be able to make as many updates.

[Prince Imdol]

Ya, I took my SSAT yesterday. It was long boring and easy in some parts.
Can't wait to see that cool site when its finished.

[smcginnis]

This is very nice. I know it's kinda an old topic, but it's such a nice chapter that I had to comment. The story is intriguing, and the grammar and spelling are great.

There was only one part that I thought needed changing:

Subjects of Andrastil. A great trouble has befallen our people. The Black Wolves of the north have assaulted our people.

It's a bit repetitive. I'd suggest making the second "our people" "us" instead. That, and the last paragraph is in a larger font, though that's more of a formatting problem.

And since I forgot to comment on the first chapter, I'll just say here that it's very nice as well.

~smcginnis

[Spongey]

Thanks for commenting. Just an update, I've had a lot of homework + extra curricular activities, so this is why the story has come to a bit of a standstill. Hopefully I'll be able to get some more chapters out soon.