Hey all,
Part two of my epic story is up on my website. Check out Courage Chosen at http://quickblade22.tripod.com/id7.html .
Make sure you read part one if you haven't already. Questions and comments welcome.
Roaring Sun... part 2
- Quickblade22
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Roaring Sun... part 2
Chief Smithy of Brick Forge
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I buy LEGO, I play with LEGO, therefore LEGO are not for children, they are for me!
- Prince Imdol
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It does move a little fast in some parts, so I suggest slowing it down, but thats just the kind of writing I like to read, and it really depends on who you are. I like it to be slow and sweet, except in battle scenes.
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Sow an action, reap a habit.
Sow a habit, reap a character.
Sow a character, reap a destiny"
"Don't let school interfere with your education."-Huckleberry Finn
"Sow a thought, reap an action;
Sow an action, reap a habit.
Sow a habit, reap a character.
Sow a character, reap a destiny"
"Don't let school interfere with your education."-Huckleberry Finn
- Quickblade22
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Yea, it does seem to go fast in some parts. The reason is that when I began writing this story, it was supposed to take place about 24 years after the events you are reading. So essentially, I have 24 years of events to lead up to. I have an outline for it, but have only about 1 "chapter" worth of material written. Thanks for taking the time.
Chief Smithy of Brick Forge
I buy LEGO, I play with LEGO, therefore LEGO are not for children, they are for me!
I buy LEGO, I play with LEGO, therefore LEGO are not for children, they are for me!
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Great so far (haven't read Chapter 3 yet) I like how it is more dialouge driven than narrative. Can't wait for the pics
~Aaron~
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