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Roaring Sun part four...and a few questions

Postby Quickblade22 » Sun May 27, 2007 3:59 am

Check out the fourth installment of Roaring Sun http://quickblade22.tripod.com/id10.html
I have a few questions to the readers. First, what do you think of the title Roaring Sun? It was supposed to be a working title, but I couldn't think of a better one. Second, I know that it would be more interesting if I had pictures up. I'm working on it. What would you think if I purchased a few things from Brickforge? I know people are reading the story, but some more feedback would be appriciated. Thanks.
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Postby Strider » Sun May 27, 2007 1:05 pm

yhe title is fine and it is a great story. would be better illustrated lile the kingdom of Ikros.
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Postby Prince Imdol » Sun May 27, 2007 7:25 pm

As a reader, (This is my opinion), I do think the story is a little but dull. I know it is in its developing stages, and is still a work in progress story, but it could be spiced up a bit. This is why the forth chapter is good. You fast moving, but not bumby action. To me, I think title is good, but not a good name for a book. Try this:
The Roaring Sun Chronicles
Book One "So and So"

Just my opinion.


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