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the prouloge of my story (kingdom of anor) is finished the linnk is here (link to site in signature) i dont know when the chapters of the story will be finished but i will notice you
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Hi erikut,

I like the story, you have a great start there. Your story reminds me a bit of a cross between the Reign of Fire movie and the Shannara books. Have you thought of enlisting an editor? I have a few skills in that department and I would be happy to edit your story to make it a little easier to read. PM me if you would like some help.

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hehe thanks i seen the regin of fire and got some inspiratin from there but i have never read the shannara books (tried to start once but i didnt finish it before i had to deliver it back) the future stuff i got from this horror cartoon have no idea what its called in english. it would be great of you to be my editor so i just pm the chapter or something as i make them (wich will make you the first to read them that must be an honur)
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Post by JPinoy »

You also might wanna use white instead of bright green as your text. It kinda hurts my eyes when I read that.
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Post by Formendacil »

Visually, things look good, and story sounds good. I just want to point out, as Will did, that your spelling/grammatical skills could use a little work. I would guess, that since you're from Norway, English isn't your native language?
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i vill change the green into whie at once and i know i write english like a blind horse whit eating disoders
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erikut wrote:i know i write english like a blind horse whit eating disoders
hehehe! I bow to the King of Similies!
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Post by Robin Hood »

Looks great. I didn't any spelling erorrs, but then I am pathetic at spelling and writting, even though english is my native langquauge. (or however you spell it). The picture at the end, did it mean anything?
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Robin Hood wrote:Looks great. I didn't any spelling erorrs, but then I am pathetic at spelling and writting, even though english is my native langquauge. (or however you spell it). The picture at the end, did it mean anything?
I think that wlister did some great editing. Thats why.
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Post by wlister »

I did some quick editorial work for erikut. There may be a few grammatical anomalies, but the spelling should be spot on.

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