Chapter 4 is 'Finally' finished....

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What did you think of chapter 4 ??

I liked it alot !!!
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71%
It was alright...
3
21%
....Boring....
1
7%
 
Total votes: 14

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Chapter 4 is 'Finally' finished....

Post by Legolas »

and It only took me what six months......yea I know I need to get my butt in gear :P

anyways....

Heres it is:

Chapter IV ~ A Dark Ritual

Hope it was worth waiting for....... :?

Feedback is always appreciated :)

-- Joey

EDIT: Just wanted to add that Chapter 5 'might' be done by the end of the month, but I'm not making any promises.... :wink:
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Post by Formendacil »

Story looks good.

I think the pictures are a bit too dark to consistently hold attention. Makes it typically hard to see.
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Post by Barbapple »

Dude...
This is sweet....
I really liked it! I think the dark pictures added to it!
I love how you put the two plumes together to make 'claws'
Great work man!
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Post by Robin Hood »

At first, it was bit hard to understand and a bit boring, but once I read it for a bit, got into it. Great Job. THe pictures though could use a bit of work but still good. :wink:
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Post by erikut »

i said it before and i sayit again it rocks (i was the first one to read it muahahaha)
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Post by wlister »

Nicely done. I too really like the two plumes for claws. I think the darkness of the pictures adds to the mood of the story, so keep it up.

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Post by Sir Troy of Linebaugh »

I say there, well done Legolas :) That chapter was very good and I can't wait for the next. The suspense is great. I look forward to reading your story in it's whole when it's finnished. I like the character with the red armour also. Once again it was very good :D
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Post by Dragon Master »

Good job, nice story...

Don't use clone brick! :wink:
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Post by Luís »

Legolas, I only have one thing to say.
Traitor!!!! You used a megablocks shield.
:evil: :evil: :evil: :evil: :evil: :evil: :evil:
[url=http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/7sword7/]Shelved bricks(???)[/url]
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Post by wlister »

I think the use of clone bricks in the story adds some character. For all our complaints about Megabloks, they have started making a fairly decent series with the Dragon line. They may not fit as well together and the plastic might be cheaper, but the set and part design have some definite visual qualities lacking in TLC's designs over the last few years. Besides, not everyone is rich annd can afford to be exclusive about their brick buying. Megabloks is certainly a cost effective alternative. So back off on the bashing unless you want to drop the coin to help him become a purist.

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Post by Formendacil »

You know, I never even noticed that there were MBs in the story. They must have been blended fairly well.

Good job then, I assume, Joey!
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Post by Dire Avenger »

I like the massive look of the guy in black with the megablocks sheild. You have superbly blended in the Megabloks as well.

Hmm, im guessing you used baking soda and put a LEGO skull on top of it for the remains of the Man in Light Chain Mail Armor....

Oh yeah and your pictures are cleaned up superbly!

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