The Black Scroll of Ragnok

[ottoatm]

Hi all!

Well now, I have finally gotten some ooold pictures together and begun making a new LEGO story!

Man, it's been awhile!

It's a good idea to start at "Chapter 0" and then go to "Chapter 1".

Chapter 2 will be out in June!

http://legelot.50webs.com/ragnokScroll/blackScrollRagnokIndex.html

NOTE - Chapter 1 has few pictures in the beginning because these were lost and my collection is back in NY. I'll add them later, when I go back home.

If anyone would like to help out with pics for this, let me know!

Please let me know your thoughts!

[Napoleon]

I glanced at it yesterday over on CW. I, for one, will be reading.

[Napoleon]

Well, I read a large section, and I really enjoyed myself. It is the best recent addition to the story section. I love your writing style: it's fancy and descriptive without being too hard to understand. Keep it up!

[ottoatm]

Hey! Many thanks for the reply Napoleon. Sorry I haven't been too good at reviewing yours - I'm travelling in Hong Kong and various parts of China now, so time is tight. Plus, you write so much! (that's a GOOD thing!)

[ottoatm]

Da Jia Hao!

Chapter 2 is complete! --> http://legelot.50webs.com/ragnokScroll/blackScrollRagnokIndex.html

Please do let me know your thoughts... too much talk? Too little talk? Too many details? Pics, etc?

[Sir Zeppelin]

ottoatm, I must admit...I never before have read any of your work--I guess I just never got around to it. I read part of The Black Scroll of Ragnok just now, really liked it, and decided that I should go more in chronilogical order. As such, I'm reading the Ancient Tomes of Chiron right not; as soon as I'm finished with that, though, then I'm on to The Black Scroll of Ragnok!

[Napoleon]

Okay, I've read the entire story so far, and I must say that it's fantastic! I love how detailed it is plus all of the great, clear pictures. One thing though: is the Black Pope at the king's castle with Batlek and the creepy "cast" guy, or is it the cast itself? Just wondered, because the guy yelled out, "The Black Pope approaches."

[ottoatm]

ottoatm, I must admit...I never before have read any of your work--I guess I just never got around to it. I read part of The Black Scroll of Ragnok just now, really liked it, and decided that I should go more in chronilogical order. As such, I'm reading the Ancient Tomes of Chiron right not; as soon as I'm finished with that, though, then I'm on to The Black Scroll of Ragnok!

Glad to hear it mr. Zeppelin Tomes of Chiron is only 2 books out of 4 complete, as my collection (you guessed it) is in ny and I need to take more pics. Hope you like the first 2 books (though)!

Black scroll is not related directly to Chiron (later some stories will be related) so it's not required to read one before the other. I think it's a good idea though, just to get the "feel" of Legelot and its history.

I'm glad you like it Napoleon! I was worried a bit about chapter 1, but chapter two gave me a good feeling when I finished it.

About your question... I didn't state it directly, but the pope is "using" the cast. I don't want to say much now, but basically the pope uses these old warrior bodies to travel long distances or even fight. He inhabits the cast remotely.

Chapter 3 comes out next month.

[Sir Zeppelin]

Well, I just finished reading both chapters; I must say that I throughly enjoyed it! You are very descriptive with your writing, which makes the story much more appealing to read. I like it how you placed the whole situation: a dying kingdom, a strong, not about to give up king, and so on.

I think the pictures will improve once you and your collection are reunited (reunited ands it feels so good,... ) Am I correct in saying that you lack the LEGO to do larger shots? Right now, it mainly shows their faces and maybe a little bit of scenery/background; it helps, but it doesn't really add to the story a whole lot (unfortunetly ) I must commend you for making the best out of what you have for LEGO over there in Asia...you've done a good job!

Chapter 3 comes out next month.

I'm looking forward to it!

[ottoatm]

Hi all~

Well, a bit behind schedule, here is chapter three --> http://legelot.50webs.com/ragnokScroll/blackScrollRagnokThree.html

The reason for the delay (besides life) is that I was very unhappy with chapters 0,1 and 2. I have since gone back and edited/rewritten all three chapters.

Please let me know your thoughts/comments/etc.

Criticisms are truly welcome - that's the only real way to get better eh?

One note I should say is that this is not the same as ATC - I don't have as much time (or a collection) here now, so I'm just doing this for fun, and without quite as much time investment.

However, I still believe the story is good, and enjoyable.

谢谢你们！

[ottoatm]

It's been a looooong time, but I'm finally firing the engines up again... look for the Black Scroll to (Finally) end soon.

The story has very much been my Macbeth - constant issues, problems, tragedies and delays.

I'm happy with it and it's role in setting up Legelot's world, but... man! Time to move on!

[ottoatm]

Chapter 4 is underway now, as things begin to wrap up in the land of Ragnok!

Chapter for is about 1/3 finished... here are two pages as of now... would love your feedback~

http://legelot.50webs.com/images/storie ... hpt4_1.png
http://legelot.50webs.com/images/storie ... hpt4_2.png


The previous chapter, for reference http://legelot.50webs.com/ragnokScroll/ ... Three.html

[ottoatm]

Chapter 4 is officially done! Let me know if you enjoy or (gasp!) not!

The forces are gathering around the keep of Ragnok and a final showdown is coming in future chapters~

>>Chapter Four<<

Previous Chapter

Deeplinks:
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[ottoatm]

Chapter 5 is alive and online!

http://legelot.50webs.com/ragnokScroll/ ... kFive.html

The battle and attack on the Keep begins formally, and Basil goes through... an interesting transformation!