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Many of you may have forgotten about the Short Stories section of Sava's Chaos Skies site. In order to excersise my writing skills, I've created a story for it. Keep in mind this is fan-fiction... Sava has ultimate control of his characters.

I know this story isn't exactly "short" but for sure it won't be as long as The Immortal War or anything.

Here is is: The Three Mercenaries

I sure hope you Mods can take a joke :wink: (you'll find out why when you reach the end of the second chapter). Be sure to check out some of the other writing I have on there too.
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Sooner than my predictions, I finished Chapter III. Athos, EKnight, this one might prove to be of particular interest to you. :wink:
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Don't you think you might want to get permission before using someone else's characters or names in a story before you write it? It is not an act of fiction now. These people could easily take offense and demand you remove their names from your publication. I know that I would, so please do not use me in your story. It might be best if you try to write a story of your own creation.
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Bluesecrets wrote:Don't you think you might want to get permission before using someone else's characters or names in a story before you write it? It is not an act of fiction now. These people could easily take offense and demand you remove their names from your publication. I know that I would, so please do not use me in your story. It might be best if you try to write a story of your own creation.
Thanls for pointing this out. As I mentioned above, Sava has ultimate control over his characters. This being a piece of fan-fiction, naturally it will use some of his characters. In the story, I will not kill or do anything drastic (if at all) to any characters of Sava's creation. This is just a story about the Immortal War told from Durall and his comrade's point of view. If Sava does not approve of something I do concerning characters of his creation, I will of course modify the story.

As to your second point, I think I made a mistake. My intention is to have a referance to each usergroup of Classic-Castle; I really, really should have contacted the users before I used their usernames. From now on while writing this story, I will be sure to do that. If anyone who's username I have already used wishes to have their's removed from the story, just PM me, and I will be more than happy to comply. Here's a list of usernames I have used for Characters:

Maedhros
Ottoatm
Nathan (Lord_of_The_Lego)
Formendacil
Gib (The Green Knight)
Athos
Elephant Knight

As I said, I will contact before writing in the future. Thanks for brining that up, Blue.
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I for one am all for being an evil leader, as long as I get to have ottoatm as my subordinate ;)
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Maedhros wrote:I for one am all for being an evil leader, as long as I get to have ottoatm as my subordinate ;)
Sweet! The prospect of being an evil cronie could be interesting. :twisted:

I'm all for allowing usage of my handles if it means creativity and (best of all) Lego story-writing is the result.
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I just want apologize to you, Sir Zeppelin, for not telling you how much I enjoy your writing, I am just now trying to get back on track with the LEGO online community after being sick for over a month with that accursed Swine Flu. Oh, by the way, I am very sorry, but my Dad said he dosen't want me to PM anymore... :cry: Nothing against you of course, but I have got to do what he says. Anyway, I visited your site, and liked it a lot, and about what you said about making a site for Castleland: go ahead! Just give me credit as the original creator and consult me about things like maps. Other than that, you're the Castleland Story President and you can do what you want. Oh, and make sure the other writers are given credit too. :wink: You are a great writer and I look forward to seeing your Three Mercs story progress! :wave:
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Napoleon wrote:I am just now trying to get back on track with the LEGO online community after being sick for over a month with that accursed Swine Flu.
Sorry for a small diversion off-topic - my friend here in China had this too... it is no picnic! Welcome back, hope you feel better~

Let us know if there is a website for Castleland, I'd love to see another story website. 8)
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Sorry for my inactivity everybody--the computer got moved, and, naturally, the phone jack wasn't up-to-date.
I just want apologize to you, Sir Zeppelin, for not telling you how much I enjoy your writing
Thanks for the compliments.
I am just now trying to get back on track with the LEGO online community after being sick for over a month with that accursed Swine Flu.
Ouch! Sounds like a tough show... (I'm feeling glad I got vaccinated).
Oh, by the way, I am very sorry, but my Dad said he dosen't want me to PM anymore... Nothing against you of course, but I have got to do what he says. We can still send each other our stories, but other than that...
Hmmm... I don't know how your Dad made that decision, but oh well. I'll be sure to keep you updated on The Three Mercenaries.
Anyway, I visited your site, and liked it a lot, and about what you said about making a site for Castleland: go ahead! Just give me credit as the original creator and consult me about things like maps. Other than that, you're the Castleland Story President and you can do what you want. Oh, and make sure the other writers are given credit too. You are a great writer and I look forward to seeing your Three Mercs story progress!
Don't worry; I'll be sure to credit all of the writers. Now, I need to get back to work on The Three Mercenaries! New chapters, new chapters... :wink:
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Wow; it's been since February 20th :o . That's definetly a good little spell of time. I am pleased to announce, however, that the fourth chapter is done. You can view it here.

Well, there's going to be a change to the story. Rather than having it be a full-blown epic about Durall's role in the Immortal War, it'll end after Chapter V. It will simply be a short story about how Durall came to be involved in the war. I've decided to do this so I can work on stories of my own creation; however, I do feel honored to have written a story about the land of Ikros.

Chapter V is coming up!
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I'll try to read it tomorrow. I am looking forward to it. :) It's been a while since you added to your story, so I might read the whole thing over again. Keep on writing! :wave:
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Amazing story!
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