AK_Brickster wrote:Overall a very interesting little cartoon.
Errors I spotted:
P1 - It should say, "The world is uneasy. Someone is returning, someone powerful. He will come to take revenge on the one who defeated him, and put him in his prison for all eternity."
P2 - "I didn't think this would be possible. I thought he would be gone forever and never be able to return."
P3 - just need to correct spelling of "armer"
P4 - Page number 4 doesn't exist.
P5 - "The armor was meant to bring peace and freedom to the mortal world... He made it so it would destroy the world and then he would take control of it."
P6 - No corrections. Looks good!
P7 - "It's time to call the others!" (you should use "it's" instead of "its")
P8 - Look good.
P9 - "Go, my little friend. Find them and tell them that I am waiting for their arrival."
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