Look out, Sava...

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Look out, Sava...

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Because here comes Barbod! :D
That's right! the much anticipated.....er......slightly anticipated.....er.....anticipated.....er...well someone must have been waiting for it...
Anyways, The *New* Tales of Barbod are up and running!
And without any ferther ado....
http://www.freewebs.com/onceuponabull/index.htm

Please, please let me know you opinion! I've worked hard on this...so yeah :P

Peace out!
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Hey!
It looks really good, I like that you make the bulls the good guys, thinking outside the box there:)



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Post by Legolas »

Hi Brian,

Nice work :)

Can't wait to see more :D

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nice really liked it cant wait to se more of that story :D
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Will the falcons defeat the Bulls? Is this the end of Barbod? I will make it my quest to find out...I just don't get why King Leo is with the bulls...
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Great work! Nice plot! Can't wait for more!


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Barbapple wrote:Because here comes Barbod! :D
That's right! the much anticipated.....er......slightly anticipated.....er.....anticipated.....er...well someone must have been waiting for it...
I've been waiting ages for this! :D

I'll make a deal with you, I'll update the Lone Falcon Chronicles more often, and you continue to update the Tales of Barbod!

This is a great begining, at last we see into Barbod's past! :twisted:

I can't wait for more!
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Post by Formendacil »

Looks good so far! The pics are good and the story's good. I'd recommend running over your actual wording a bit more, sometimes your word order is a little confusing.

But otherwise, it looks great.
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Great start! I can't wait to find out what happens in the next part, it will be good to see the battle. You have written it well, so that it ends on a cliff hanger (of some sort) so we (well, I) want to read the next bit.

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I like the first part. It is very well done and it makes you want to read more. If you keep writing I'll keep reading!


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Very Interesting story. You have a great start here. Keep it up. I like the way you have illustrated the story and I am looking forward to seeing some updates. :D

You might want to enlist an editor much the way Anthony has done. It takes someone who is outside the story to see some of the grammatical mistakes we make. There are a few here and they do detract from the story.

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wlister wrote:You might want to enlist an editor much the way Anthony has done. It takes someone who is outside the story to see some of the grammatical mistakes we make. There are a few here and they do detract from the story.
I'd be more than willing to be your editor, all I ask is due credit. PM me if interested.
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Wow. :shock: 11 replies. I must say, this is far better than I expected. Well, now is the time I reply to the replies.
Hey!
It looks really good, I like that you make the bulls the good guys, thinking outside the box there:)

-JOEL#
Thanks, Joel! It's a rather long (and boring) story how the bulls became good, and the falcons bad.....I'll have to tell you some time....
Hi Brian,

Nice work

Can't wait to see more

-- Joey
Hi Joey! Thanks....belive it or not, I'm working on Chapter 1 as we speak--er--type. It's fun having too much time :P
nice really liked it cant wait to se more of that story
Thanks.
Will the falcons defeat the Bulls? Is this the end of Barbod? I will make it my quest to find out...I just don't get why King Leo is with the bulls...
oooooo, the suspence is building, lol :D I always loved the king Leo head, and he was the best 'Old man bull' I could find. (Thank you Legofreak)
Great work! Nice plot! Can't wait for more!


Dave
Hey, Dave! Thanks! You'll see more, soon enough...
I've been waiting ages for this!

I'll make a deal with you, I'll update the Lone Falcon Chronicles more often, and you continue to update the Tales of Barbod!

This is a great begining, at last we see into Barbod's past!

I can't wait for more!
I knew someone out there must have been waiting for this!
And you've got yourself a deal! Thanks, Nate.!
Looks good so far! The pics are good and the story's good. I'd recommend running over your actual wording a bit more, sometimes your word order is a little confusing.

But otherwise, it looks great.
I have my new editor working on that 8)
Great start! I can't wait to find out what happens in the next part, it will be good to see the battle. You have written it well, so that it ends on a cliff hanger (of some sort) so we (well, I) want to read the next bit.

Jon.
Hey, Jon! Thanks! I know, I know, My writing rocks..and I know I'll be the next Tolkin 8)....or at least the next Robert Munch.....no?......Ok, I will be the first Brian Gibbons!
I like the first part. It is very well done and it makes you want to read more. If you keep writing I'll keep reading!


-The Josh
Hey The Josh!
Wow that sounds like bad grammer :?
It's these repys that make me want to keep writing :D
So if you keep reading, I'll keep writing!
--The Brian
Very Interesting story. You have a great start here. Keep it up. I like the way you have illustrated the story and I am looking forward to seeing some updates.

You might want to enlist an editor much the way Anthony has done. It takes someone who is outside the story to see some of the grammatical mistakes we make. There are a few here and they do detract from the story.

Will
Wow, I reply from Will! My story must be good 8)
Thanks you, Will! I have enlisted an editor.....
I'd be more than willing to be your editor, all I ask is due credit. PM me if interested.
There's my editor :D

Well, thank you ALL for the very kind replys! I needed that!

Peace out,
Brian
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Post by Robin Hood »

Cool. I like it. Great work. I don't quite like the idea of the story, but each to his own. I bet some of you wouldn't like the views I put on some other themes.

Great job again. Can't wait for more. :wink:
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Nice prologue! I hope it becomes into a well made Lego story.
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