Look out, Sava...
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Look out, Sava...
Because here comes Barbod!
That's right! the much anticipated.....er......slightly anticipated.....er.....anticipated.....er...well someone must have been waiting for it...
Anyways, The *New* Tales of Barbod are up and running!
And without any ferther ado....
http://www.freewebs.com/onceuponabull/index.htm
Please, please let me know you opinion! I've worked hard on this...so yeah
Peace out!
Brian
That's right! the much anticipated.....er......slightly anticipated.....er.....anticipated.....er...well someone must have been waiting for it...
Anyways, The *New* Tales of Barbod are up and running!
And without any ferther ado....
http://www.freewebs.com/onceuponabull/index.htm
Please, please let me know you opinion! I've worked hard on this...so yeah
Peace out!
Brian
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Re: Look out, Sava...
I've been waiting ages for this!Barbapple wrote:Because here comes Barbod!
That's right! the much anticipated.....er......slightly anticipated.....er.....anticipated.....er...well someone must have been waiting for it...
I'll make a deal with you, I'll update the Lone Falcon Chronicles more often, and you continue to update the Tales of Barbod!
This is a great begining, at last we see into Barbod's past!
I can't wait for more!
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Great start! I can't wait to find out what happens in the next part, it will be good to see the battle. You have written it well, so that it ends on a cliff hanger (of some sort) so we (well, I) want to read the next bit.
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Very Interesting story. You have a great start here. Keep it up. I like the way you have illustrated the story and I am looking forward to seeing some updates.
You might want to enlist an editor much the way Anthony has done. It takes someone who is outside the story to see some of the grammatical mistakes we make. There are a few here and they do detract from the story.
Will
You might want to enlist an editor much the way Anthony has done. It takes someone who is outside the story to see some of the grammatical mistakes we make. There are a few here and they do detract from the story.
Will
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I'd be more than willing to be your editor, all I ask is due credit. PM me if interested.wlister wrote:You might want to enlist an editor much the way Anthony has done. It takes someone who is outside the story to see some of the grammatical mistakes we make. There are a few here and they do detract from the story.
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Wow. 11 replies. I must say, this is far better than I expected. Well, now is the time I reply to the replies.
And you've got yourself a deal! Thanks, Nate.!
Wow that sounds like bad grammer
It's these repys that make me want to keep writing
So if you keep reading, I'll keep writing!
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Thanks you, Will! I have enlisted an editor.....
Well, thank you ALL for the very kind replys! I needed that!
Peace out,
Brian
Thanks, Joel! It's a rather long (and boring) story how the bulls became good, and the falcons bad.....I'll have to tell you some time....Hey!
It looks really good, I like that you make the bulls the good guys, thinking outside the box there:)
-JOEL#
Hi Joey! Thanks....belive it or not, I'm working on Chapter 1 as we speak--er--type. It's fun having too much timeHi Brian,
Nice work
Can't wait to see more
-- Joey
Thanks.nice really liked it cant wait to se more of that story
oooooo, the suspence is building, lol I always loved the king Leo head, and he was the best 'Old man bull' I could find. (Thank you Legofreak)Will the falcons defeat the Bulls? Is this the end of Barbod? I will make it my quest to find out...I just don't get why King Leo is with the bulls...
Hey, Dave! Thanks! You'll see more, soon enough...Great work! Nice plot! Can't wait for more!
Dave
I knew someone out there must have been waiting for this!I've been waiting ages for this!
I'll make a deal with you, I'll update the Lone Falcon Chronicles more often, and you continue to update the Tales of Barbod!
This is a great begining, at last we see into Barbod's past!
I can't wait for more!
And you've got yourself a deal! Thanks, Nate.!
I have my new editor working on thatLooks good so far! The pics are good and the story's good. I'd recommend running over your actual wording a bit more, sometimes your word order is a little confusing.
But otherwise, it looks great.
Hey, Jon! Thanks! I know, I know, My writing rocks..and I know I'll be the next Tolkin ....or at least the next Robert Munch.....no?......Ok, I will be the first Brian Gibbons!Great start! I can't wait to find out what happens in the next part, it will be good to see the battle. You have written it well, so that it ends on a cliff hanger (of some sort) so we (well, I) want to read the next bit.
Jon.
Hey The Josh!I like the first part. It is very well done and it makes you want to read more. If you keep writing I'll keep reading!
-The Josh
Wow that sounds like bad grammer
It's these repys that make me want to keep writing
So if you keep reading, I'll keep writing!
--The Brian
Wow, I reply from Will! My story must be goodVery Interesting story. You have a great start here. Keep it up. I like the way you have illustrated the story and I am looking forward to seeing some updates.
You might want to enlist an editor much the way Anthony has done. It takes someone who is outside the story to see some of the grammatical mistakes we make. There are a few here and they do detract from the story.
Will
Thanks you, Will! I have enlisted an editor.....
There's my editorI'd be more than willing to be your editor, all I ask is due credit. PM me if interested.
Well, thank you ALL for the very kind replys! I needed that!
Peace out,
Brian
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Nice prologue! I hope it becomes into a well made Lego story.
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