chapter one of the kingdom of anor chronicles
chapter one of the kingdom of anor chronicles
i have finaly made the first chapter of my story and its called Chapter One: In the Early Days
http://www.home.no/erikutt/ch1.html
this is altsto editet by will
if you missed my prouloge you can read it herehttp://www.home.no/erikutt/prolog.html
Erik
http://www.home.no/erikutt/ch1.html
this is altsto editet by will
if you missed my prouloge you can read it herehttp://www.home.no/erikutt/prolog.html
Erik
Nice start there. It has all the essentials to a story; ledgend, fighting, death, fighting... well, its a good story.
Kinda reminded me of LOTR a bit. I hope you finish the next one soon so we can read it.
Jon.
Kinda reminded me of LOTR a bit. I hope you finish the next one soon so we can read it.
Jon.
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It is very nicely illustrated, the pictures really do their job. I do think that you should develop it all a little more slowly, but I am used to reading Charles Dickens, who is extremely slow at developing plots to the point of boredom, not to mention being the most negative writer I have ever read the works of Am I correct in the that the first chapter is kind of another prolougue?
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Hey Erikut,
Looks good. I particularly like the picture that's a bird's eye view looking down on the four warriors surrounded by attackers, and I'd like to see a better photo of the creature with the trans-orange wings.
One critique is that I would avoid using names that too closely remind of works by Tolkien or other fantasy writers (e.g. King Meduseld). That makes it seem more derivative.
Bruce
Looks good. I particularly like the picture that's a bird's eye view looking down on the four warriors surrounded by attackers, and I'd like to see a better photo of the creature with the trans-orange wings.
One critique is that I would avoid using names that too closely remind of works by Tolkien or other fantasy writers (e.g. King Meduseld). That makes it seem more derivative.
Bruce