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A Little taste of things to come..

Postby Legolas » Sat Jun 18, 2005 6:02 pm

Tonight, Crispen Smythe felt very strange, as he watched the
flames at the fireplace flicker away. "A dying flame." he murmured.
An appropriate if rather maudlin metaphor, thought Crispen. He
sighed. He was weary and wanted very much to finally rest. But
not tonight, Only the dead slept on this night. The Eve of the Dead.

Each year on this forsaken night, the people of Maranor would
lock their doors and light their altar candles, fasting and keeping
vigil until dawn. For the constellation of their god had vanished from
the sky, and with no protection from their god, the Shadow World
drew ominously near.

It was clear that Crispen was expecting someone, as he kept
glancing over at the hour glass with eager anticipation.

"He's late," Crispen whispered softly to himself. Almost as if in
answer, a sudden gust of wind blew in through a window and the
flames flickered.

Sensing a presence in the room behind him, Crispen turned
from the fireplace. In the dim glow of the flickering fire, he saw a
tall, dark, and slender figure appear in the center of the chamber.
His full-length, hooded cloak billowed in the dissipating wind of
his arrival, then settled down around him, giving the brief
impression of wings being folded back.

"I am never late, I arrive exactly when I mean to."
The voice was unmistakable. It was deep, and resonant, with
the old, familiar sound of crackling bones.

"That was quite an entrance.." said Crispen. "Are you ready
to fulfill our deal ?"


Enjoy,

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Postby TheOrk » Sat Jun 18, 2005 7:59 pm

Good job Legolas. It's written nicely and looks interesting, I can't wait to read the first chapter!Nice job with the Gandalf quote :wink:
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Postby Legolas » Sat Jun 18, 2005 8:32 pm

Thanks :) . After I wrote that line it occurred to me, that it sounded an awful lot like the line Gandalf used. I may need to change that.. lol

This is actually a section taken from the prologue, I should have it finished by monday, I may even make a vignette to accompany it.

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Postby eNiGMa » Sat Jun 18, 2005 9:50 pm

All I have to say is nice work! I hope to see more of this soon.
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Postby grown_up_nerd » Sun Jun 19, 2005 2:33 pm

Legolas you're a pretty good writer. Keep at it.

I like the name Crispen. :D
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Postby DarkDotDotDotMan » Sun Jun 19, 2005 6:41 pm

Oh! So are you going to post your stories with pictures like SavaTheAggie does? Here's hoping your success!
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Postby Legolas » Sun Jun 19, 2005 7:28 pm

grown_up_nerd wrote:Legolas you're a pretty good writer. Keep at it.

I like the name Crispen. :D


Thanks for the great compliment, I will try my best to keep writing really well. :)

I also like the name Crispen :wink:

DarkDotDotDotMan wrote:Oh! So are you going to post your stories with pictures like SavaTheAggie does? Here's hoping your success!


Indeed I plan to have atleast one picture per page, maybe two, and thanks. I will try my best to make my story a great read.

Stay tuned for more !!

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Postby ottoatm » Mon Jun 20, 2005 12:58 am

Indeed I plan to have atleast one picture per page, maybe two, and thanks. I will try my best to make my story a great read.


Cool man!

One piece of corny-sounding advice. Don't worry too much about making the story a great read for everyone... I've found I write best when I just say "this is for me" and have fun writing.

I know that's probally wierd to hear from me, since I have never published anything on CC... but when I have written for the public, thats what I've found to work best. When I worry too much about how something is or how is sounds, the whole thing just becomes one big source of stress to me and I drop the whole thing. :P

Anyway, just wanted to give that piece of dorky advice... and tell you that I'm looking forward to seeing more of you stuff! 8)
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Postby The Hordesman » Mon Jun 20, 2005 5:36 am

I think two pics are too few, you got a digital camera, right? So why not 5 or so? :wink:

Very well written, guess why I made my story a cartoon? Im a bad writer!
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Postby Legolas » Mon Jun 20, 2005 6:38 am

Ottoatm - What I meant by "I will try my best to make my story a great read." is that, I want to keep my audience interested without boring them to death with alot of words. But I know what you mean, and I will keep your words in mind.

The Hordesman - Well, I figure with all the description I will have, two pictures would be more then enough to explain whats going on. Who knows, I may decided to go with three or four. It all depends on what I feel up to doing :wink: .

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Postby venvorskar » Sat Jun 25, 2005 6:52 pm

It sounds good! :) I hope to see more soon, but I realize that it takes a while to write the story and take pics.
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